CK Lynn

Nice. A bit different, painful without being angst. I liked the imagery. Passionate. You could add a verse or two, though. This version seemed to end too quickly.

I liked this a lot. It didn't try to be overly-meanigful, which was nice, just kind of a musing.

I liked this. It was really different. I did think the word "cloud" was used too many times though.

Hmmm. I liked how the poem came full-circle, but I didn't really get the meaning of the piece.

Though I liked this, I stopped reading before the last verse. It just seems to drag on. Cut out the weaker sentances, and shorten some others. Other than that, this ...

:smt043 I really liked this piece. Though it was a bit long, it was really funny.

I liked it. Honestly though, you don't need to rate it R. Maybe just PG-13

It was oookay... Your puncuation was way off, which made it even harder to read. I don't believe I saw a single apostrphe. Other than that, the thing was way ...

Cool! this was really different. The only thing I didn't like was that there seemed to be several different voices in the piece.

best story i have read on this site yet!!! fantastic, absolutly fantastic.

It's different. Not sure if I like it yet. As Elder Bobo said, what's going on here? Expand on that part of it. I really don't think kung fu is ...

Hmmm...okay. I get your point, sorta. But the poem itself was just to general for any real thought. We want information! Who is this person? What's the secret? Description! Imagery!

I kind of dropped off after two verses. Really, this is more rant than poem, in my opinion. It would help if there was more of a poemy-feel (does that ...

I liked this poem a lot. There was one line that didn't fit, though, and that was "one chance is all I asked for". For some reason the otherwise good ...

Well, its not really supposed to be about fire, just kind of about how this girl sees herself, as this other being.